Andre Said:

HELP - COVER LETTER CRITIQUE?

We Answered:

it is way to long. a cover letter should be short and to the point. you wrote a book

Cheryl Said:

cover letter edit help?

We Answered:

Uh, your letter sounds arrogant, you need to tone it down:

I am submitting the enclosed resume in consideration for the student summer position offered at Canfor. I would like the opportunity to return to the mill and continue to develop my skills and understanding of Canfor because my previous experience with you was remarkable.

I've three years of cleanup at the mill which resulted in plenty of experience including but not limited to performing a full range of duties related to the cleaning of assigned buildings and facilities and running errands.


Presently, I am enrolled at Thompson Rivers University, Kamloops, studying the BA in Finance program.

I am available for interviews at your convenience. Thank you in advance for your consideration. I look forward to your response.

Miriam Said:

Please answer the following question?Please answer the following question?Please answer the following question?

We Answered:

Are u sure is this ur question!!

Ron Said:

Can someone proof read my cover letter on my resume?

We Answered:

It is good. Short and to the point. Not lots of flowery sentences. The word "I' appears in almost every sentence. It would be "good English" to reword 2 of the sentences to remove the I. ( you could remove the "and i will return your call" from that sentence)..

Travis Said:

Is this appropiate for a cover letter?

We Answered:

I would make the following changes.

I am responding to the XXX position posted on XXXXX. Attached please find my resume for your review.

Based on the job description provided, I feel I would be an excellent candidate for this position as I have a strong work ethic and consistently strive to exceed my employer's expectations.

My strengths are working effectively in a high-paced, high-stress environment and having the ability to multi-task without compromising the quality of my work.

I enjoy interacting with both the general public as well as my co-workers and strive to make sure each customer receives exceptional care.

My prior experience includes both manual and automated cash register systems and I posess strong math skills.

Please contact me at your convenience so I can learn more about the needs of your company and discuss my qualifications in further detail.

Sincerely,

XXXXXXX

Just a tip -- the hiring manager may get a ton of responses and they do not like to have to read lengthy e-mails. Manager's are busy people and like it short and sweet.

Good luck to you!!!!